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August 19th, 2013, 1:16 pm

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AnxiousA

Here is the first page. Not an extremely exiting page, but hope you enjoy it non the less.

-A.

@stupidarghs: Thanks so much!!! <3
@jonasfx: Thanks! >u< !!

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stupidarghs

ooh man <> w <>
yer pages are so goood

I love how you do backgrounds

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jonasfx

whoa yeah, terrific setting~

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MadMindInk

ooo~ which direction is that?
i like the writing, gets my attention.
although, i think the first box is a bit confusing.

when you are drowning, its hard to figure out, when you're fighting your way to the surface, or just sinking....

you are drowning, so what's hard to figure out? something is missing there.

is it hard to figure out whether you are fighting or sinking?

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AnxiousA

@MadMindInk: When someone is drowning, the brain goes into shock and a person who is sinking underwater can become disoriented. If they gain enough depth in the water, they won't be able to tell which way is up or down. I was trying to incorporate some of that feeling here, but it might not have come across as clearly xvx")\

Thanks for your feedback, I'll be more aware in the future!

BTW, I'm happy to have you reading my comic, I'm a big fan of your's!!!
-A.

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jonasfx

@MadMindInk: @AnxiousA:
I think I got it from the start. but it took the rest of the text to really get it for me.

it might just be a vague reference? if I had written the first box I'd change it to "when you are drowning, its hard to figure out, if you're fighting your way to the surface, or just sinking"
I just changed when to if here, does that make more sense?

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MadMindInk

@jonasfx: ah yes! this makes more sense, grammatically.

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AnxiousA

@MadMindInk:@jonasfx:
Meant to fix that, but missed it on my last overview of the pages xvx)\
I've posted the corrections now! Sorry, totally read over the mistake.
Thanks for pointing it out to me.

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jonasfx

:)

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